Thank you for your time and interest in discussing my thoughts on upgrading your theme park Dutch Wonderland. I feel the upgrades proposed will be a huge benefit to your park and profits.
The upgrades proposed are upgrading the roller coaster by changing the material and color, the mascot by changing the whole character, and the monorail by changing the design and color.
This is how unique my ideas are from other parks because the monorail will be colored like no other and will make it stand out. Also there is no other roller coaster with a checkered color. Last there are no other parks with a nice bear like the one I think you should take. It will all make you successful because it will draw peoples eyes on it and then it want to do it.
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This will benefit your park because it will make people want to come to the park to see what you did and that will mean that people will come back and new people will come meaning more customers which means will make a large profit.
That you again for taking time out of your busy day to listen to what I think you should do to your park. I hope you will consider my idea with updating your park.
Thank you for listening to what I think you should do to your amusement park