(draft) Holiday Shopping I go to the shopping center last week. I go there because my Mum like to buy many things. I can see many shops in the shopping center. I see a toy shop. It is beautiful. I see a sportwearshop. It is big. I see a restaurant. It is small. I love to shop.
Grade: WTE (Working Towards Expectation) NOTES: Great job, Anna! I've been continuosly seeing a lot of improvements on your writing tasks. I am very happy that you have been following the previous notes I have given you. I have underlined the words that you need to change, into its past tense, on your final writing task. Also, please add more DIFFERENT sentence structures and what you can but in those shops. I am very excited to read your final writing next week!
You did a great job on your final writing task, Anna! Please read my notes for on your paper.
Thank you, Miss Frances. I always read your notes because it guides me what I need to write.
(final) Holiday Shopping I went to the shopping center last week. I went there because my Mum likes to buy many things. I saw many shops in the shopping center. I saw a toy shop. It is beautiful. There are many dolls, teddy bears and toy cars there. I saw a sportwearshop. It is big. My Mum bought sneakers and shorts. I saw a restaurant. It is small. The food there was yummy! I love to shop.
Grade: ME (Meets Expectation) NOTES: WOW! Your work is impressive, Anna! Again, I am happy that you read the notes and learn from them and add more to your writing. Let's try changing your adjectives on your next writing. The words big, small and beautiful are tired. Let's try using different adjectives that you can see on your word lists. I am excited to read your task next week! Great job! :)