I had some hard times in my FYI class during my first semester at Beloit College, especially with expressing my feelings in the stories we had to write.
Hi, I wrote this story about how I dislocated my kneecap during my freshman year of high school. Everything is fine now.
When I was telling my story to the class, I used very unemotional words that didn't have a lot of meaning in them mostly because I had already accepted what happened, but also because I didn't want to show how I really felt to my classmates.
The doctors told me I would be able to play sports again in 4-6 weeks, but I ended up healing fast enough to be cleared to play in 2 weeks.
I think I would have rather not shown my emotions to the class because I wanted to seem like I was fine with what happened, even though it had bothered me for a long time. For a little while after the injury healed, I would have scary thoughts about me getting injured again. This eventually went away, though, and now I at peace with the matter.
I had a reoccurring injury about a year later in one of the softball tournaments I was playing in, but it didn't completely dislocate that time. It turned out to be a common event that has happened to many people.
My FYI teacher told me after I was finished telling the story that I was too "superficial" in my writing, and that I needed to put more emotion into it. I didn't really know how to do that because I don't usually like to express my feelings to others in my life.
So I promised I would try to write with more compassion, and what ended up happening was I wrote about my family more often. That makes me realize that I care about my family more than anything else, and I feel the most comfortable in expressing my feelings with them.
Emily, if you could put just a little more emotion into your writing, that would be great.
Okay, I will try to write about more things I am passionate about.