Well, you didn't connect your ideas Julia. If you used words like for, and, nor, but, or, yet, or so then the sentence would flow smoother. There called coordinating conjunctions and there very important.
Elle I shouldn't have gotten a C on my essay it was so good. What even is sentence fluency?
Julia, its not that hard but if you keep complaining it will be. You don't only use fanboys. You also have to avoid issues like run on sentence's, sentence fragments, and incorrect use of punctuation.
I would like a four shot espresso.
Yata, yata, yata. I don't care Elle. I did it right so I don't know why she marked me off. Also, for your information, I know what all those things are.
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PLEASE ELLE I DONT WANT TO DIE IM TOO YOUNGE IF THIS IS TO MAKE ME DO YOU LITTLE SCENTNCE FLUENCY THEN FINE WHY WOULD YOU TAKE ME ON THAT DO YOU WANT TO KILL ME?!?!?!?!
See it's not that hard, but that sentence was a run on and could use some work. Grammar, punctuations, and spelling are also important when writing. That and sentence length can really help tie a story together.
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See how easy it is once you get the hang of it? Now you'll be getting an A in no time, good job!